Chaos' Written Works

[Saiyokuro]

Sorry it took me so long to read Insomnia and Somnia Chaos. I apologize for that and i'm very sorry.

also i do suck at writing and all that so my responses suck. So please forgive me if this sucks.

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But i think that you did very well on both of them and the fact that they are both interconnected with each other is really cool. also the fact that the past dream oracle is dreaming up everything and the future dream oracles life is nothing but a dream in itself was a really good idea and i quite like that it adds a nice bit of twist and everything to the story (at least it does for me) although it made me a little sad how she killed her future self even though her future self was just a dream and wasn't real.

But all in all very nice story

also i will be getting back to you on everything else you posted here as soon as i can ok.

[ChaosMuramasa]

It's cool, Saiyo. Nothing to worry about. I understand completely. Life can get a bit hectic at times. I know how that feels first-hand.

I appreciate your response and I'm glad you enjoyed it. As of late I've been thinking on what I could do with the story of the Dream Oracle and her universe. A lot of possible alternate timelines and parallel futures and pasts...I think I'll be visiting that universe again soon in the future and write a bit more about it.

[Saiyokuro]

Thanks for understanding Chaos, and i'll be getting to the other ones you've posted hopefully a little later today or soon if i can ok.

and if you post more for it then i will definitely read it

[Koromaigis]

Such Deep thought and filled with such emotion...I am blown the fuck away.

[ChaosMuramasa]

so it's been 9 months since i last wrote something. god damn.

hi guys. it's currently late as fuck but for the first time since last june i managed to find enough inspiration to actually sit down and write something. its a 4 page short story. pretty experimental. mostly me just free writing. not too much structure.

going to fine tune it for errors and such tomorrow, then ill post it.

---------- Post added at 04:39 PM ---------- Previous post was at 04:00 AM ----------

Okay, I finished revising it, so I'll post it here. But first, if you're a reader who likes music, here's the track I played while writing on auto-repeat.

And here's the actual work, entitled "her turn."

Again, this was the first time I've written in nearly a year, so if it's not up to par with my other stuff, well, that's why.

Criticisms, feedback, general thoughts would be wholeheartedly appreciated. Thanks in advance and hope you like it.

[Khell]

For some reason I can only view the first page, but you should probably watch how long sentences run on for. Even if it's still properly constructed, the length of what's written can kind of throw people off. Try to keep sentences more simple at the start, then modify them later rather than having to do it backwards.